Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержательный, но есть ошибки и не хватает связности и точности. Улучшите грамматику (артикли, согласование), уберите лишние заполнители (umm, like), используйте связующие слова для плавного рассказа и ограничьтесь не более 4–5 предложений. Примерные исправления: добавить артикль перед "bike"/"interesting", заменить разговорные вставки, конкретизировать детали (где и с кем катались), дать одну-две поддерживающие детали.

例: Yes, I had a bike and I learned to ride it when I was about twelve or thirteen. It was an interesting experience because I practised every afternoon with my older cousin in the park. As a result, I became quite confident and used the bike regularly to visit friends and explore my neighbourhood.

提案: Хорошая идея ответа, но он содержит разговорные междометия и несколько грамматических неточностей (согласование числа, артикли). Сделайте вступительное предложение прямо, используйте связующие слова (for example, moreover) и приведите конкретные факты или примеры (велодорожки, события), чтобы усилить аргументацию. Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений для ясности.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially in cities like Astana. For example, I often see many people cycling along the dedicated bike paths throughout the city, and there are organised cycling events on weekends. Therefore, cycling is both a common mode of transport and a popular leisure activity.

× Yes, I had a bike and I actually learned how to ride it when I was like 12 or 13.

✓ Yes, I had a bike, and I actually learned how to ride it when I was about 12 or 13.

Used 'like' as an informal filler to indicate approximate age; 'about' is more appropriate in this context. Also added a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: use 'about' for approximate ages and include commas to separate clauses.

× So it was a interesting experience and I did use bike a lot and.

✓ So it was an interesting experience, and I did use the bike a lot.

Incorrect article: 'a' before a vowel sound should be 'an'. Also 'use bike a lot' lacks the definite article 'the' for a previously mentioned noun. Remove the trailing conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds and 'the' when referring back to a specific item; avoid sentence fragments.

× It is quite popular in my country, umm, when I hang out in the city, I see lots of umm, people who ride bicycle and, uh, they're enjoying it and we actually have special path for it, uh, throughout the city.

✓ It is quite popular in my country. When I hang out in the city, I see lots of people who ride bicycles and enjoy it, and we actually have special paths for them throughout the city.

Multiple preposition/article/number issues: 'ride bicycle' needs plural 'bicycles' (countable noun) and no 'who' clause comma change; 'they're enjoying it' better as 'enjoy it' for habitual observation. 'special path' should be plural 'special paths' to agree with 'lots of people' and 'for it' is awkward; use 'for them' referring to bicycles. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use plural forms for general statements about many people and match pronouns to their antecedents; use simple present for habitual facts.

× we actually have special path for it, uh, throughout the city.

✓ We actually have special paths for them throughout the city.

Countable noun 'path' should be plural 'paths' when referring to multiple routes across a city. 'for it' is incorrect because 'it' (singular) does not agree with plural 'bicycles'; use 'them' or 'for cycling'. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches context and pronouns agree in number.

× It is quite popular in my country, umm, when I hang out in the city, I see lots of umm, people who ride bicycle and, uh, they're enjoying it and we actually have special path for it, uh, throughout the city.

✓ It is quite popular in my country. When I hang out in the city, I see lots of people who ride bicycles and enjoy it, and we actually have special paths for them throughout the city.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'people who ride bicycle' should be 'people who ride bicycles'. 'they're enjoying it' suggests a present continuous but the speaker means habitual action, so simple present 'enjoy' is correct. Also adjusted articles and plurals for agreement. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and ensure noun plurals and pronouns agree with their antecedents.