Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler phrases.

例: I don't think I had a bike when I was a child. Instead, I spent most of my free time skateboarding, so I rarely used or needed a bicycle. As a result, I have no clear memories of owning one.

提案: Answer directly, then give a brief specific reason or example and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repeating words and be precise about location or context.

例: Generally, bikes are not very popular in my country. In my city, for example, most young people prefer electric scooters and skateboards because they are more convenient for short trips and easier to store.

× To be honest, I don't remember whether I had a bike or not. I was into skateboarding at that time, so and I don't have a memory of bike memory.

✓ To be honest, I don't remember whether I had a bike or not. I was into skateboarding at that time, so I don't have any memory of owning a bike.

The original contains a sentence fragment and redundant words ('so and' and 'bike memory') which create a sentence structure error. Remove the extra conjunction 'and' after 'so' and replace the awkward phrase 'memory of bike memory' with 'any memory of owning a bike' to convey the intended meaning clearly. Use 'owning a bike' to express possession in the past and 'any memory' for natural collocation. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I don't think that bikes are popular in my country, but I know that scooters and skateboarders are really popular in in the place where I live right now.

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in my country, but I know that scooters and skateboards are really popular in the place where I live right now.

The original repeats the preposition 'in' twice ('in in') and uses 'skateboarders' (people) where the speaker likely means 'skateboards' (the vehicles), creating a preposition and word-choice issue. Remove the duplicate 'in' and replace 'skateboarders' with 'skateboards' to match parallel structure with 'scooters' and to refer to the items that are popular. This fixes the incorrect preposition usage and improves clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11