Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, use correct tense and simple sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence about whether you had a bike, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense), clearer vocabulary (e.g. "pink bicycle with training wheels"), and shorter sentences will make your answer natural and effective.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small pink bicycle with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in the local park. I used to practice there every day with my younger sister, and it was great fun.

提案: Answer directly, use clear reasons and linking words. Begin with a topic sentence stating whether bikes are popular, then give specific, logical reasons (e.g. affordability, convenience in rural areas, health benefits). Use appropriate vocabulary (e.g. "rural areas" not "countryside there are cheap"). Keep sentences concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. They are inexpensive and easy to maintain, so many people use them for short trips. In addition, cycling is a good way to exercise and avoid traffic, which makes bikes a practical choice.

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✓ Well, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small pink bike with training wheels, and I learned to ride it in the park with my younger sister. I used to go there almost every day because it was fun.

This sentence contains multiple sentence structure problems (ID 26) and several related errors: incorrect tense and verb forms, wrong pronouns, improper word order, and missing or extra words. Corrections made: changed 'have' to past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child'; corrected 'as a children' to 'was a child' for singular agreement; interpreted 'mob' as 'small' and reordered 'pink colour bicycle wheel training routes' to 'small pink bike with training wheels'; replaced 'learned to read it' with 'learned to ride it'; changed 'while my younger sister' to 'with my younger sister'; corrected 'a month every day' to 'almost every day' to produce a natural expression. Suggestion: break long incoherent phrases into separate sentences, ensure tense consistency, and use simple, common collocations (e.g., 'ride a bike', 'training wheels', 'used to').

× Adding bicycle uh could keep properly in my country, especially in countryside there are cheap and common for shops and many people extremely opposite. They can do exercise or avoid transfers.

✓ Bicycles can be kept easily in my country; they are especially common and cheap in the countryside and available in many shops. Many people use them for exercise or to avoid using public transport.

This sentence has incorrect use of prepositions and awkward word choice (ID 11). Corrections made: replaced 'Adding bicycle uh could keep properly' with 'Bicycles can be kept easily' and restructured the sentence for clarity; changed 'in countryside' to 'in the countryside' (definite article with geographical area); 'cheap and common for shops' corrected to 'common and cheap ... available in many shops'; 'extremely opposite' was unclear and removed; 'avoid transfers' corrected to 'avoid using public transport'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions and articles ('in the countryside', 'available in shops'), choose precise vocabulary ('public transport' instead of 'transfers'), and simplify sentence structure for clarity.