Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural, concise, and better organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (past tense, articles) and avoid contradictory or unclear phrases (e.g., “blacken colour”).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red Hero bicycle that my parents gave me for my tenth birthday. It had a black seat and slightly worn handlebars, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house every weekend.

提案: Answer directly, use clear subject-verb agreement, and add one or two specific reasons or examples linked with connecting words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrase order.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many office workers and students ride motorcycles or scooters to avoid traffic and save money on fuel.

× Okay definitely I had a bike when I was a child it was red color and the brand name was Hero It was gifted on my birthday and it has a blacken colour.

✓ Okay, definitely I had a bike when I was a child. It was red and the brand name was Hero. It was a birthday gift, and it had black details.

Errors: run-on sentence and inconsistent verb tenses/word forms. 'Okay definitely I had a bike when I was a child it was red color...' is a run-on; separate into sentences. Use past tense consistently ('had', 'was', 'was gifted' -> 'was a birthday gift' or 'was gifted' both past). 'red color' is incorrect collocation; use 'red' or 'red in color'. 'It was gifted on my birthday' is understandable but more natural as 'It was a birthday gift.' 'it has a blacken colour' mixes present tense 'has' with past context and uses incorrect adjective 'blacken'. Change to past tense 'had' and correct adjective 'black' or 'black details'. Suggestions: split into shorter sentences, keep past tense throughout, use natural collocations (e.g., 'red', 'black details', 'a birthday gift').

× Of course the bikes are very important as it plays a crucial role in daily life.

✓ Of course, bikes are very important as they play a crucial role in daily life.

Error: subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference. The subject 'bikes' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'play' not 'it plays'. This matches the plural subject. Also comma after 'Of course' improves fluency. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with their subjects.

× Many people travel bike from bike to different to their workplace.

✓ Many people travel by bike to their workplace.

Errors: incorrect preposition and redundant/misordered words. Use the prepositional phrase 'travel by bike' to indicate mode of transport. Remove duplicated words 'bike' and misplaced 'different to'. Also 'to their workplace' is sufficient; if meaning multiple workplaces, say 'to different workplaces'. Suggestion: use 'travel by bike to work' or 'travel by bike to their workplace' and avoid repetition.