Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use past tense consistently; avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., “I do have” → “I had”; “inviting a bike” unclear) and limit to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. We often rode it around the local park with my brothers, which became our main bonding activity. For example, we used to race each other every weekend and then have a picnic, so those rides are a core childhood memory for me.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to connect points and provide a specific example or reason. Replace vague phrases (“new peoples”) with precise words (“many people”); avoid repeating “country.” Keep answer concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, particularly in rural areas. In many villages they are the main means of transport because roads are narrow and public transport is limited. As a result, many people use bikes to commute to work or school every day.

× Yes, when I was young, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I had a bike.

The sentence mixes past time reference ('when I was young') with present tense 'do have'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently for past situations: 'I had a bike.'

× Uh, we used to ride it around the park together with my brothers and it is our bonding activity and we have a fun inviting a bike and it is a core memory for us.

✓ We used to ride it around the park with my brothers; it was our bonding activity, and we had a lot of fun riding the bike. It is a core memory for us.

Multiple issues: mix of past and present tense and incorrect verb forms. 'Used to' requires past descriptions: 'it was our bonding activity' and 'we had a lot of fun.' 'Inviting a bike' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'riding the bike.' Also split into clearer clauses. Suggestion: Keep past tense for past routines and use correct verb forms: 'we had fun riding the bike.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in our country, especially our country is in a countryside.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country, especially in the countryside.

Redundant phrase 'our country is in a countryside' is ungrammatical. Use 'in the countryside' to indicate rural areas. Suggestion: Say 'especially in the countryside' or 'particularly in rural areas.'

× Bikes are the primary source of transport in our place.

✓ Bicycles are a primary means of transport in our area.

'Bikes are the primary source' is acceptable but 'source' with 'transport' is awkward; better collocation is 'a primary means of transport.' Also 'our place' is informal; 'our area' is clearer. Suggestion: Use 'a primary means of transport' or 'the primary mode of transport.'

× Many new peoples use it, especially when going to work and going to school.

✓ Many people use them, especially when going to work or school.

'Peoples' is incorrect for 'people' (plural of person). 'New' is unnecessary without context. 'It' should match plural 'bicycles' so use 'them' or omit pronoun. Also use 'work or school' rather than 'going to work and going to school' for conciseness. Suggestion: Use 'many people' and ensure pronoun agrees in number with the noun: 'they' or 'them.'