Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clarity, accuracy and coherence. Give a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar (e.g. 'bought' not 'buy', 'by' → 'was'), and avoid unrelated or garbled phrases. Keep answers natural and concise (maximum 4–5 sentences). Use linking words to add a short supporting detail (e.g. 'because', 'so', 'then'). Mention one or two specific details (age, type of bike, what you learned).

例: Yes, I did. I got a small bike with training wheels when I was seven, and I used it to learn how to balance. Because I practiced every weekend, I could ride without the training wheels after a few months. Eventually I switched to a bigger bike and started cycling to a nearby park.

提案: Make the answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'for example', 'as a result'). Avoid repetition ('I think' twice) and subject–verb errors ('students who are'). Provide a brief comparison or example to strengthen the answer.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many students who are too young to ride motorbikes use bicycles to get to school because they are cheap and convenient. As a result, you can often see groups of children cycling together in the morning.

× I think I got a buy when I was seven years old.

✓ I think I got a bike when I was seven years old.

The error is a word choice/typo: 'buy' is a verb meaning to purchase, but context requires the noun 'bike'. This is not in the provided list exactly, but it affects past-tense statement meaning. Replace 'buy' with 'bike' to match intended noun and past-tense 'got'.

× It was a by a small bike with training wheel where I can practice riding the bike wedding weather.

✓ It was a small bike with training wheels where I could practice riding in good weather.

Multiple errors: extraneous 'by a' is incorrect article placement (article errors/word order), 'training wheel' should be plural 'training wheels' (singular/plural), 'can' should be past ability 'could' to match past context, and 'wedding weather' is a mistaken phrase — likely 'good weather'. Fixing these matches past-tense narrative and correct noun forms. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (use could), use plural for wheels, and choose correct adjective phrase 'in good weather'.

× But then I used to drive.

✓ But later I learned to ride it without the training wheels.

'I used to drive' is unclear and mismatched: 'used to' indicates a habitual past action, and 'drive' usually refers to cars; for bicycles say 'ride' and clarify progression. The sentence should maintain past narrative and clearly state the change (learned to ride without training wheels). This corrects verb choice and improves clarity and coherence.

× I mean every student who are who are too young to ride a motorbike they would use a bike to travel to school because it can save them time and money as well.

✓ I mean every student who is too young to ride a motorbike would use a bike to travel to school because it can save them time and money.

Errors include subject-verb agreement: 'every student' is singular and requires 'is' not 'are' (grammar problem type 27). The repeated 'who are who are' is redundant. Also remove the extra pronoun 'they' after the relative clause to avoid a sentence structure error. Final sentence keeps present general truth, so 'would' or 'will' can be used; 'would' is acceptable for habitual/generalized statement. Suggestion: match singular subject with singular verb and avoid redundancy.