Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте грамматику и порядок слов, говорите понятно и логично. Используйте простое связное предложение, сначала дайте прямой ответ на вопрос, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с конкретной деталью (например, возраст, кто подарил, где вы катались). Избегайте бессмысленных фраз и неправильных слов (например, 'my child', 'Mike', 'second Thursday').

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was eight years old — my father gave it to me as a birthday present. I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon with my friends.

提案: Сформулируйте мнение кратко и поддержите его конкретными причинами и, по возможности, примером. Используйте связки (because, therefore, for example) для логичности. Избегайте повторов и тавтологии («So the reason of this»).

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because many roads are in poor condition and there is little cycling infrastructure. For example, there are few bike lanes and heavy traffic, so most people prefer motorbikes or cars.

× Yes, of course my child.

✓ Yes, of course.

The student used 'my child' incorrectly as a form of address; it is not appropriate here. Use a simple affirmative response. Suggestion: respond with 'Yes, of course' or 'Yes, I did.'

× I was very big fan of Mike about in my second Thursday my father gave me a bike.

✓ I was a big fan of Mike, and on a Sunday when I was ten my father gave me a bike.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: missing article before 'big fan', incorrect preposition 'of' alone is OK but word order is jumbled, 'about in my second Thursday' is ungrammatical and unclear. I replaced the unclear time expression with a clear age/time phrase. Suggestions: use the article 'a' before 'big fan', connect ideas with conjunctions, and use clear time expressions like 'when I was ten' or 'when I was a child'.

× No, I don't think so, because in our country the roads are very bad.

✓ No, I don't think so, because the roads in our country are very bad.

The clause is understandable but the word order is awkward. Placing 'the roads in our country' is more natural. Suggestion: keep present simple 'don't think' for general opinions and use natural English word order.

× So the reason of this, the bike is not very popular in my country.

✓ So for this reason, bicycles are not very popular in my country.

'The reason of this' is incorrect; use 'for this reason' or 'because of this'. Also 'the bike' is too specific; use plural 'bicycles' for general statements. Subject-verb agreement with plural 'bicycles are' is required. Suggestion: use 'for this reason' and plural nouns when speaking generally.