Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer clearer and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence stating whether you had a bike. Use past tense for childhood, correct verb forms, and avoid redundant or confusing phrases. Add one specific detail about the bike (colour, who gave it, or how you used it) and use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday gift, and it was a small blue bike with training wheels. However, I wasn't very interested in cycling, so I only rode it occasionally. Despite that, it was useful for short rides around the neighbourhood.

提案: Give a concise, well-structured response: state your opinion, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use varied vocabulary and linking words, avoid repetition, and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Mention who rides bikes, where, and why (e.g., exercise, commuting, leisure).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities and suburban areas. For example, many people cycle on weekends for exercise and socialising, and there are also dedicated bike lanes in some neighbourhoods. I often join my friends on group rides because it's fun and a great way to stay fit.

× Since I was young I have a lot of bike, but I only wrote one 'cause I'm not the type of guy that love bike so much, but my parents just got for me a lot of fight for even on my birthday.

✓ Since I was young I have had a lot of bikes, but I only owned one because I'm not the type of person who loves bikes so much; however, my parents bought me many as gifts, even on my birthday.

Errors: 'a lot of bike' (plural noun requiring 'bikes'); 'wrote' is incorrect word choice (should be 'owned'); 'guy' better as 'person' for formality; 'love' must be third person singular 'loves' to agree with singular 'who' referring to 'person'; 'love bike' needs plural 'bikes'; 'got for me a lot of fight' is nonsensical and likely intended 'bought me many' and word order is wrong. Suggestions: use correct plural forms (bike → bikes), use appropriate verbs ('have had' for possession from past to present), ensure subject-verb agreement ('who loves'), and choose correct verbs and word order ('bought me many as gifts').

× Since I was young I have a lot of bike, but I only wrote one 'cause I'm not the type of guy that love bike so much, but my parents just got for me a lot of fight for even on my birthday.

✓ Since I was young I have had a lot of bikes, but I only owned one because I'm not the type of person who loves bikes so much; however, my parents bought me many as gifts, even on my birthday.

Error: 'that love bike' uses base verb 'love' but needs third person singular 'loves' because it refers to 'person' (he/she) in a relative clause. Suggestion: change to 'who loves bikes' to match subject-verb agreement and plural noun form.

× Since I was young I have a lot of bike, but I only wrote one 'cause I'm not the type of guy that love bike so much, but my parents just got for me a lot of fight for even on my birthday.

✓ Since I was young I have had a lot of bikes, but I only owned one because I'm not the type of person who loves bikes so much; however, my parents bought me many as gifts, even on my birthday.

Error: 'that' used for person is less natural than 'who'; 'me' positioning 'got for me a lot of fight' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'who' for people and correct word order 'my parents bought me many (gifts)'.

× Since I was young I have a lot of bike, but I only wrote one 'cause I'm not the type of guy that love bike so much, but my parents just got for me a lot of fight for even on my birthday.

✓ Since I was young I have had a lot of bikes, but I only owned one because I'm not the type of person who loves bikes so much; however, my parents bought me many as gifts, even on my birthday.

Errors: mixed tense and wrong verb choice 'wrote' and 'got' used incorrectly. Suggestion: use 'have had' to express continuous possession from childhood and past simple 'owned' and 'bought' for completed actions.

× Since I was young I have a lot of bike, but I only wrote one 'cause I'm not the type of guy that love bike so much, but my parents just got for me a lot of fight for even on my birthday.

✓ Since I was young I have had a lot of bikes, but I only owned one because I'm not the type of person who loves bikes so much; however, my parents bought me many as gifts, even on my birthday.

Error: run-on sentence and incorrect clause order and word choice ('a lot of fight'). Suggestion: break into clearer clauses, correct vocabulary ('bikes', 'owned', 'bought'), and use connectors ('however') to show contrast.

× Yes of course, especially around my area, especially during the weekend I have seen a lot of bike, even me.

✓ Yes, of course, especially in my area. During the weekend I have seen a lot of bikes, including myself.

Errors: 'around my area' should be 'in my area'; 'a lot of bike' requires plural 'bikes'; 'even me' is colloquial and unclear—'including myself' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct preposition 'in', pluralize countable nouns, and use clearer expressions.

× Yes of course, especially around my area, especially during the weekend I have seen a lot of bike, even me.

✓ Yes, of course, especially in my area. During the weekend I have seen a lot of bikes, including myself.

Errors: 'around my area' is awkward; 'during the weekend' is acceptable but 'on weekends' is more natural for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'in my area' and consider 'on weekends I see' for habitual present.

× I also go out with my friend riding in the group and it's actually really fun and also improve our health as well.

✓ I also go out with my friends to ride in a group, and it's actually really fun and also improves our health.

Errors: 'friend' should be plural 'friends' for going out with a group; 'riding in the group' should be 'to ride in a group' or 'riding in a group' depending on structure; 'improve' must be 'improves' to agree with 'it' (singular). Suggestion: use 'to ride' after 'go out' or use gerund consistently and maintain subject-verb agreement ('it improves').

× I also go out with my friend riding in the group and it's actually really fun and also improve our health as well.

✓ I also go out with my friends to ride in a group, and it's actually really fun and also improves our health.

Error: 'improve our health' should be 'improves our health' because the subject is 'it' referring to the activity, which is singular. Suggestion: match verb form to singular subject.