Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть грамматически корректным, более естественным и кратким. Начните с чёткого тематического предложения, затем добавьте одно или два уточняющих предложения с конкретикой (например, сколько лет вы начали кататься, где ездили). Используйте прошедшее время и свяжите идеи словами (for example, often, usually). Избегайте лишних слов и повторов.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it at about six and I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood and to school.

提案: Ответ нужно сделать полным, грамматически правильным и подкрепить причинами или примерами. Начните с прямого утверждения, используйте связку и затем укажите причины (например, экономичность, удобство, пробки) или конкретные данные. Избегайте пауз и неясных слов.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. Many people use them to avoid traffic and for short trips, and you can often see bike lanes in cities.

× Yes, when I was a child I have a bike and I rode every day.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike and I rode it every day.

The original sentence mixes past time reference 'when I was a child' with a present tense verb 'have'. Use the simple past 'had' to match the past time frame. Also a direct object 'bike' repeated by 'it' improves clarity: 'I rode it every day.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent by using past tense verbs for actions in the past.

× Of course, in my country is very popular. Uh, transport.

✓ Of course, bikes are very popular in my country as a mode of transport.

The original has an omitted subject and unnatural word order: 'in my country is very popular' lacks the subject 'bikes' and incorrectly places 'in my country' before the verb. Also 'Uh, transport' is a fragment. The corrected sentence supplies the subject 'bikes', uses the plural verb 'are', places the location 'in my country' after the verb phrase for natural flow, and combines the fragment into 'as a mode of transport.' Suggestion: Always include the subject and complete the idea in one sentence; avoid sentence fragments.