Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer and useful supporting details. To improve, make the response slightly more concise, avoid minor redundancy (e.g., "I used to" and "every weekend" together are fine but could be tightened), and add one linking phrase to make the structure clearer. Also vary vocabulary a bit (e.g., use "sibling" or "brother" less repetitively) and keep to a maximum of 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike with training wheels that my parents bought for my seventh birthday, and I rode it around the park every weekend with my older brother. I remember practicing turns and building confidence until I could ride without the training wheels.

提案: Clear opinion but some awkward phrasing and redundancy. Improve by using more natural collocations (e.g., "bikes are very popular"), avoid absolute statements like "every other" unless certain, and include a linking word to support your reason. Make details more specific (e.g., mention urban cycling, bike lanes, or cultural habits) and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children and adults use them for leisure and short trips. For example, families often ride in parks in the evenings, and in some cities people also cycle to work because of improved bike lanes.

× Yes, I did. I had a small red bike with training wheels that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday and I used to ride it around the park every weekend with my older brother.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a small red bike with training wheels that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it around the park every weekend with my older brother.

The sentence is mainly correct in tense usage (past simple and 'used to' for habitual past). The only issue is a run-on sentence missing a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses. Add a comma to improve readability and follow punctuation rules for compound sentences. Suggestion: Insert a comma before 'and' when connecting two independent clauses.

× Yes, I do think the bikes are very much popular in our country because every other small child has a bike of his own and they love to ride their bikes in the park every day around in the evening.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are very popular in our country because almost every small child has their own bike, and they love to ride in the park in the evenings.

Problems corrected: 'the bikes are very much popular' is ungrammatical — 'very popular' modifies a noun without 'much'. Remove 'the' and 'much' to say 'bikes are very popular' or simply 'bikes are very popular in our country'. 'Every other small child' is awkward and likely incorrect for generalization; use 'almost every small child' or 'every small child'. 'a bike of his own' uses a gender-specific pronoun and awkward phrasing; use 'their own bike' for gender neutrality and 'own' follows the noun. 'ride their bikes in the park every day around in the evening' has redundant time expressions; use 'in the evenings' or 'every evening' and simplify 'ride in the park'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, use 'very popular' not 'very much popular', prefer 'almost every' or 'every', use gender-neutral 'their', and streamline time expressions to 'in the evenings'.