Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на ясном и грамматически правильном ответе: дайте краткое вводное предложение о том, имели ли вы велосипед, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с причинами или описанием. Избегайте повторов и слов-паразитов (например, «like», «and and and», повторы «when I was»). Исправьте времена (прошлое: I had / My favourite bike was) и используйте связки для связности (for example, because, although).

例: Yes, I had several bikes when I was a child. My favourite was a sporty bike because it looked fast and helped me ride longer distances. For example, I often cycled to the park with my friends, which was both fun and convenient.

提案: Дайте полное предложение, прямо отвечающее на вопрос, затем объясните причину с конкретным примером. Устраните повторы (например, «popular popular», «types of types of») и завершите мысль. Используйте связки (because, so, therefore) и добавьте конкретику (где и кто чаще использует велосипеды).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in smaller towns. For example, many students and commuters use bicycles to get to school or work because they are cheap and easy to park, so cycling remains a common choice.

× When I was when I was a child, I have a lot of types of like my favorite bike was a sport sport bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had many kinds of bikes; my favorite was a sport bike.

The original sentence repeats phrases and mixes tenses and structures. Error type: sentence structure and tense consistency. Use simple past 'had' to match 'When I was a child'. Remove repetition ('when I was' and 'sport sport') and replace colloquial fillers ('types of like') with 'kinds of'. Suggestion: keep clauses clear and use consistent past tense for past time references.

× I'm obsessed with two cycling it because it's really convenient and and and uncomfortable me.

✓ I was obsessed with cycling because it was convenient and comfortable for me.

The sentence misuses words and tenses and contains repetition. 'I'm' (present) conflicts with past context; use past 'I was'. 'Two cycling' is incorrect — use 'cycling'. 'It' is unnecessary. 'Uncomfortable me' is wrong order; use 'comfortable for me'. Remove repeated fillers 'and and and'. Suggestion: choose correct verb forms and adjective order and eliminate fillers.

× In my home town bikes are common because bikes are one of the most popular popular types of types of

✓ In my hometown, bikes are common because they are one of the most popular types of transportation.

The sentence repeats words ('popular popular', 'types of types of') and has awkward structure. Use 'hometown' as one word and add a comma after the introductory phrase. Replace the repeated noun 'bikes' with pronoun 'they' for variety and finish the thought with 'types of transportation'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and complete the comparative phrase.