Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: give a direct topic sentence then add a brief specific detail. Avoid repeating the same idea word-for-word. Use a linking word if adding a second sentence.

例: Yes, I did — I had a red bike when I was about seven. It had training wheels at first, and I rode it to my friend’s house almost every afternoon.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons or examples using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “I would think” is weak — use “I think” or “I believe”). Be precise about the rule change and its effect to make your answer informative and coherent.

例: Yes, I think bikes are still quite popular in Japan. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips and commuting; however, recently the government tightened parking and helmet regulations, which has affected how and where people ride.

× Yes, I would think.

✓ Yes, I think so.

'I would think' is conditional or tentative and sounds unnatural in direct answer to 'Do you think bikes are popular in your country?'. The question asks for a present opinion, so use simple present 'I think' (Present tense issue). Use 'so' to complete the phrase naturally.

× Actually I'm from Japan but to my understanding the government has changed the rule for the bike.

✓ Actually, I'm from Japan, and to my understanding the government has changed the rules about bikes.

The original sentence has awkward coordination and singular/plural and preposition issues. Use a coordinating conjunction 'and' for smooth connection (Sentence structure errors). 'Rule for the bike' is unnatural; use plural 'rules' and 'about bikes' (Incorrect use of prepositions and singular/plural). Also include commas for clarity.