Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. For improvement: answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 brief supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and under five sentences. For example, start with “Yes, I did” or “No, I didn’t,” then explain why or give a short memory or consequence.

例: Yes, I did. I got a small red bicycle when I was seven, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. Because my neighborhood was quiet, I learned to balance and gain confidence quickly.

提案: The answer gives an opinion and a reason, which is good, but it could be more natural and specific. Improve by using a concise topic sentence, then add a clear supporting detail with a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”) and, if possible, a brief comparison or example. Keep to a maximum of five sentences and use more natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many rural areas have narrow or poorly maintained roads where cars aren’t practical. For example, farmers often use bicycles to travel short distances, and in cities people use bikes for short commutes to avoid traffic.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child

✓ Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

The student repeated the examiner's question without the question mark and failed to provide an answer. This is a sentence structure error (missing verb to form an answer). Correction: provide a complete affirmative short answer using past tense auxiliary 'did' plus base verb 'have'. Suggestion: answer clearly to indicate possession in the past, e.g., 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike.'

× I firmly believe that bikes are popular in our country, especially since there are some roads that are not as advanced and industrialised as the others.

✓ I firmly believe that bicycles are popular in our country, especially because some roads are less developed and less industrialised than others.

The original uses 'since' (which can be correct) and 'not as advanced and industrialised as the others' which is wordy and awkward. This fits sentence improvement and incorrect use of comparative structure (incorrect comparison object/order) and present participle phrasing; here the better labels from the list are 10 (Verb in the present participle form) and 19 (Incorrect comparison object). The corrected sentence uses 'bicycles' (more formal), replaces 'since' with 'because' for clarity, uses 'less developed and less industrialised' for parallel comparative form, and drops 'the' before 'others' to correctly compare unspecified other roads. Suggestion: keep comparatives parallel (use 'less X and less Y') and omit unnecessary articles when saying 'than others.'