Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence using past tense, add one or two specific supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example: but, so, then).

例: Yes, I had a white bike when I was a child. My father originally bought it for my sister, but she rarely rode it, so I used it most of the time. I remember riding it to the park every Saturday, which helped me learn to balance quickly.

提案: Complete your sentence and give clearer reasons with linking words. Provide specific examples or comparisons (e.g., city vs countryside) and avoid repeating the same phrase. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use varied vocabulary (e.g., common, widespread, prefer, public transport).

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. Many people own them because they are cheap and convenient for short trips, especially in rural areas. However, in big cities people often prefer public transport or motorbikes because of traffic and long distances.

× Yes, I have a white bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a white bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past simple 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past simple for actions or states that occurred in the past (I had, I saw, I went).

× My father bought for my sister and then I use same thing.

✓ My father bought one for my sister, and then I used the same bike.

There are several issues: 'bought for my sister' lacks the object 'one' or 'a bike'; 'use' is present tense but the events are in the past so it should be 'used'; 'same thing' is vague—'same bike' is clearer. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and supply a clear object (bought one for my sister, I used the same bike).

× Most people have bikes but many people don't always use bike because the transportation is

✓ Most people have bikes, but many people don't always use bikes because the transportation is convenient.

Two problems: 'use bike' needs plural or an article ('use bikes' or 'use a bike'); sentence is also incomplete at the end—add the intended adjective, for example 'convenient' or 'better'. Also add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural verbs/objects and finish the sentence with the intended description (convenient/cheap/faster).