Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve accuracy, reduce hesitations, fix grammar and word choice, and make answer more concise with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, 'when' or 'because') and correct possessive forms ('my brother’s gift') and verb forms ('I ride a bike well' or 'I could ride it well').

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I received it when I was about seven as a gift from my parents for my birthday, and my older brother helped me learn to ride it. Because I practised every day, I became quite confident and could ride it well around my neighborhood.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons, and avoid vague fillers. Use linking words ('first', 'second', 'because') and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'regions', 'roads', 'public transport'). Be specific about why bikes are popular (terrain, affordability, lack of public transport). Limit to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in many parts of my country. First, in hilly and rural regions people prefer bikes because the roads are narrow and buses are infrequent; second, bikes are affordable and convenient for commuting to school or work, so many people use them daily.

× Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is correct: 'used to' properly describes a past habitual action. No change needed.

× Umm, I think I was around 7 or 8 years old when I got my new bike.

✓ Umm, I think I was around 7 or 8 years old when I got my new bike.

This sentence is acceptable: 'think' in present and 'was'/'got' in past are correctly used to express a present belief about a past event. No change needed.

× That was my brother gift from my parents.

✓ That was my brother's gift from my parents.

The sentence needs a possessive form to show that the gift belonged to the brother. Add an apostrophe-s to 'brother' to form 'brother's gift'. Alternatively, rephrase as 'a gift for my brother'.

× And yeah, I know how to ride bike very properly.

✓ And yeah, I know how to ride a bike very well.

Countable noun 'bike' requires the article 'a'. 'Properly' is grammatical but 'very well' is more natural collocation after 'ride'. Also word order 'ride a bike' is correct.

× Uh, we have three reason in our uh, country, which is Ma Mountain region, hilly region and Thurai region and Tara region, bikes are more popular because people used to, uh, use bikes to go to school, go for work 'cause the plane, uh, cause the road is very, uh, well developed and it's very accessible to umm.

✓ Uh, we have three reasons in our country: the Ma Mountain region, the hilly region and the Thurai and Tara regions. Bikes are more popular because people use them to go to school and to work, since the roads are well developed and very accessible.

Multiple issues corrected that match listed problem types: 'three reason' should be plural 'three reasons' (singular/plural issue). Region names need articles and parallel structure; 'Thurai and Tara regions' makes plurality clear. Split into two sentences to fix sentence structure errors. 'People used to use bikes' implies past habit; present simple 'people use them' fits the general statement. 'Use them' uses pronoun for 'bikes' (pronoun usage). 'Cause the plane' and 'cause the road' were unclear; 'since the roads are well developed' is clearer and corrects preposition/article and verb form. Also 'go for work' -> 'go to work' corrects preposition usage.