Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ не очень естественен и содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения. Нужно: 1) Начать с прямого тематического предложения; 2) Упростить и убрать повторения (например, "about after about a month"); 3) Исправить времена и структуру (использовать past simple для завершённых действий); 4) Добавить одно-два подробных уточнения связкой (because/so/and) — но не больше пяти предложений. Например, укажите почему велосипед сломался и что вы чувствовали или что произошло дальше.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It broke after about a month of use, so I didn’t get much chance to practice riding with my dad. I was disappointed because I had been looking forward to learning, and my father was busy with work at the time. Later, I borrowed a friend’s bike occasionally to keep practising.

提案: Ответ размытый, несвязный и содержит ошибки лексики и порядка слов. Нужно: 1) Дать прямой ответ (Yes/No/Partly) в первом предложении; 2) Использовать связующие слова (however, because, for example) чтобы структурировать мысль; 3) Быть конкретным: назвать причины (инфраструктура, безопасность, климат) и привести пример; 4) Избегать тавтологии и неясных фраз («a very in our country»).

例: They are somewhat popular in certain cities, but overall cycling isn't widespread across the country. For example, urban areas with bike lanes see more cyclists, however many places lack safe roads and bicycle parking. Because of heavy traffic and few dedicated paths, most people prefer buses or cars for daily travel.

× In my childhood I had a bike but it broke about after about a month of use and I hadn't any time to practice riding a bike with my dad.

✓ In my childhood I had a bike, but it broke after about a month of use and I didn't have any time to practice riding it with my dad.

The sentence contains past tense errors and incorrect auxiliary usage. 'about after about' is redundant; use 'after about a month'. 'I hadn't any time' is nonstandard in this context; the correct past negative auxiliary is 'didn't have'. Also use the pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: simplify the temporal phrase and use 'didn't have' for past simple negatives.

× I think in some areas they are popular but we can see that our surroundings are not available for riding bike a lot and of course you can see that a very in our country isn't so friendly to bikes and you can ride a bike home.

✓ I think bikes are popular in some areas, but our surroundings are often unsuitable for riding a bike, and in many parts of our country the roads are not very friendly to bikes so it is difficult to ride a bike home.

This sentence has present-tense and general usage problems and several awkward or incorrect expressions. Replace 'we can see that our surroundings are not available for riding bike a lot' with 'our surroundings are often unsuitable for riding a bike'. 'a very in our country isn't so friendly to bikes' is ungrammatical; clarify as 'in many parts of our country the roads are not very friendly to bikes'. Use 'it is difficult to ride a bike home' instead of 'you can ride a bike home' to match the negative context. Suggestions: use simple present for general truths, choose precise adjectives (unsuitable) and correct noun phrases ('ride a bike', 'roads not friendly to bikes').