Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question (yes/no). Then add one or two specific, relevant supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep sentences concise (maximum 4–5 sentences). Also correct grammar (past tense) and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "motorbike" or "superbike", "sound of the engine").

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I have always liked superbikes because I enjoy the deep sound of their engines and the powerful acceleration. I especially admired their aggressive design and sleek lines, which seemed exciting to me even as a child.

提案: Answer directly and then give clear, specific examples. Use linking words (however, but, for example) to structure your response. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, clearer place names if needed) and avoid unclear phrases like "loggers" unless you mean something specific. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences and use vocabulary relevant to popularity (common, widespread, urban areas).

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country, but their popularity varies by region. For example, in my city Washingta you rarely see superbikes, whereas in larger cities such as Karwaji and Slamabat superbikes are common. People in those cities often ride them for leisure and to show their style, especially among younger riders.

× In Majoro I don't have a bike but I would say that I love not normal bikes I love the super bikes because the roar of the roar and sound of the super bikes at the throttle that gives the enough potential that I would love and that design that aggressive design of the bike

✓ In Majoro I didn't have a bike, but I would say that I don't like ordinary bikes; I love superbikes because the roar and sound of the engine at the throttle give enough power, and I love their aggressive design.

The original mixes present and past tenses incorrectly and uses awkward phrasing. Use past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when you were a child' and present preferences with 'I don't like' or 'I love'. Remove repetition ('roar of the roar') and correct subject-verb agreement ('sound ... give' -> plural subject 'roar and sound' take 'give'). Replace vague 'potential' with 'power' and clarify 'aggressive design'. Suggestions: keep childhood possession in past tense, express general preferences in present tense, avoid redundant words, and ensure verbs agree with their subjects.

× I think yeah bikes are popular in my country where I live in Washingta they don't have much super bikes which are loved but in Karwaji and other big cities like Slamabat they have many superbikes where you see many of loggers who are using them and many and making logs with them.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country. Where I live, in Washingta, there aren't many superbikes, but in Karwaji and other big cities like Slamabat there are many superbikes; you can see many riders using them and making vlogs with them.

The original sentence is a run-on with tense and article problems and incorrect word choice. Use present tense for general statements ('are popular'). Use 'aren't many' instead of 'they don't have much super bikes' (article and count noun issues). Use 'superbikes' (one word) consistently and 'riders' instead of 'loggers'; if meaning video creators, use 'vloggers' or 'making vlogs'. Break into shorter sentences and use correct articles and plural forms. Suggestions: split ideas, use 'there are/aren't' for existence, ensure correct noun forms and word choice.