Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). For example, state whether you had a bike, describe it (color, type) or explain how often you used it and with whom.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday. I used it almost every day to ride around the neighborhood with my friends, which helped me become more confident and independent.

提案: Your answer gives a basic reason but is disfluent, grammatically incorrect, and vague. Improve by starting with a clear opinion (Yes/No), then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct grammar (we don’t have many cars → we often don’t have cars; we should use bikes → people often use bikes). Limit to up to 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars, especially in rural areas. As a result, bicycles are an inexpensive and convenient way to travel short distances. For example, I often see markets and students using bikes to commute to school and work every day.

× Because I think, uh, we have not a, uh, necessary, uh, car and then, uh, we uh, should use the, uh, bikes.

✓ I think we do not necessarily have a car, so we should use bikes.

The original sentence misuses quantifiers and articles ('have not a necessary car' is ungrammatical). Replace with 'do not necessarily have a car' to express lack of certainty or necessity. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'bikes' because speaking about bikes in general does not require the definite article. Also simplify filler words to improve clarity and maintain present-tense general statement.