Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., Yes or No), then add one or two brief supporting details. Use correct tense and articles (a/an/the), and avoid hesitation words like “Um” where possible. For example, if you didn’t have a bike, say: “No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child.” Then add a reason or short detail: “My family couldn’t afford one” or “we lived in a city where biking wasn’t common.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family lived in a small apartment and we mostly walked or used public transport, so owning a bike wasn’t practical.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then add two specific supporting points with linking words (e.g., because, and, for example). Keep sentences short and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar (present simple tense), plural/singular agreement, and punctuation. Structure: topic sentence + two concise reasons + a brief example or result. Avoid repeating phrases like “in my country.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are more affordable than cars and they are convenient in heavy traffic. For example, most families own one or two bikes, and people often use them for short trips to work or the market to save time and money.

× Um, I have bike in my childhood No, I don't have

✓ Um, I had a bike in my childhood. No, I didn't.

The speaker is talking about a past period ('childhood'), so present tense 'have' is incorrect. Use past tense 'had'. Also singular noun requires an article: 'a bike'. The negative response should match past tense: 'I didn't' (short for 'I did not'). Suggestion: Use past tense for past time references and include appropriate articles. Example: 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country where most of the families have one or two bikes in my country because it is more affordable compared to car and it is easy to access in traffic so we can so we could not wait too much time in traffic we can

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, where most families have one or two bikes because they are more affordable than cars and easy to use in traffic, so we don't have to wait too long in traffic.

Multiple errors addressed that fall under the given list: 'the families' is unnecessary article for general plural 'families' (Article errors and singular/plural). 'it is more affordable compared to car' has subject-number mismatch and article missing: use plural 'cars' and 'they are' to refer to bikes (subject-verb agreement and singular/plural). 'easy to access in traffic' is awkward: use 'easy to use' or 'easy to get around in traffic' (preposition/word choice). 'we could not wait too much time' is incorrect tense/modal and collocation: use present 'we don't have to wait too long' (modal/tense and adverb placement). Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, match singular/plural subjects and verbs, use correct comparative structure ('more affordable than cars'), and use natural collocations ('wait too long', 'use in traffic').