Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and modal consistency), be more concise, and add one specific detail to make the answer natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a brief reason and a short personal detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid redundant words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one then, so I usually walked to school or took public transport.

提案: Correct grammar and choice of linking words, make the comparison clear, and add a specific example or statistic. Start with a clear opinion sentence, use a linking word like 'because' or 'since', and give one concrete supporting detail. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than cars and easier to park. For example, many families own at least one motorbike, and you can see large numbers of bikes during rush hour in the cities.

× No I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because my family can't afford a bike at that time.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because my family couldn't afford one at that time.

The sentence mixes past tense ('didn't have') with present-tense modal 'can't'. Use the past-tense modal 'couldn't' to match the time frame. Also replace the repeated noun 'a bike' with the pronoun 'one' for naturalness and add a comma after 'No' for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for situations in the past and substitute pronouns to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I think the bikes are popular in my country because most like the bikes are very reasonable then cars so everyone can afford bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because most people find bikes much more affordable than cars, so everyone can afford one.

The original uses the definite article 'the' unnecessarily before 'bikes' when speaking generally; omit it. It also omits the noun after 'most' (should be 'most people'), uses 'like' incorrectly, uses 'then' instead of comparative 'than', and repeats 'bikes' awkwardly. Correction addresses article usage, inserts the missing noun, fixes the comparative structure ('more affordable than cars'), and replaces the second 'bikes' with the pronoun 'one' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: when speaking about things in general, omit 'the' and ensure comparisons use 'than'.

× So there is a huge population in my country of bikes.

✓ So there is a large number of bikes in my country.

'Huge population of bikes' is an unnatural collocation; 'population' usually refers to people or animals. The phrase order 'in my country of bikes' is awkward. Use 'a large number of bikes' to express quantity correctly. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns for quantity ('number' for countable items) and use natural collocations.