Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is correct but too brief and lacks development. To improve, give a direct topic sentence and then add one or two short supporting details (brief reason, contrast, or memory) using a linking word. Keep it natural and avoid hesitations.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I often borrowed my neighbor's bike to ride around the park after school, which was my favorite activity on weekends.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has many hesitations, repetition, and grammar issues. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words (for example, because, therefore, also), provide a specific reason or example, and avoid filler words. Aim for 2–4 well-formed sentences and vary vocabulary (popular, common, affordable, practical).

例: Yes, bikes are very common in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many students and delivery workers rely on bicycles to commute, especially in crowded cities where traffic makes driving difficult.

× No, I didn't have.

✓ No, I didn't.

The examiner's question asks 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' The expected short negative answer is 'No, I didn't.' The original 'No, I didn't have.' is incomplete because 'have' requires an object (what was not had) or a reduced form 'didn't' alone after an auxiliary. Use 'No, I didn't.' or 'No, I didn't have a bike.' to be complete. Suggestion: Use 'No, I didn't.' for short answers or 'No, I didn't have a bike.' for a full sentence.

× every person uh, uses bikes for traveling uh, and uh, some who cannot afford uh, cars, so they buy uh, bikes.

✓ Most people use bikes for travelling, and some who cannot afford cars buy bikes.

'Every person uses bikes' is awkward and often inaccurate; 'most people' or 'many people' is more natural. Also 'travelling' is the correct noun form here (or 'travel' in American spelling). The sentence was wordy and had redundancy ('they buy bikes' already implies continuing subject) so combine clauses. Suggestion: Use 'most people' or 'many people' and remove filler words for clarity.

× Bikes are not much expensive as that of uh cars, so they use bikes very much.

✓ Bikes are not as expensive as cars, so many people use them a lot.

The phrase 'not much expensive' is ungrammatical in comparative structures. The correct comparative form is 'not as expensive as...'. 'As that of cars' is unnecessary and wordy; use 'cars'. 'Use bikes very much' is unnatural; 'use them a lot' or 'use bikes a lot' is more natural. Suggestion: Use the comparative structure 'not as...as' and replace 'very much' with 'a lot' or 'frequently'.