Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn; trả lời trực tiếp rồi bổ sung chi tiết ngắn gọn (1 câu chủ đề + 1–2 câu hỗ trợ). Tránh lặp từ và những mệnh đề không rõ nghĩa. Nên dùng thì quá khứ đơn để kể về đồ vật trong quá khứ, nêu ai tặng, khi nào và cảm xúc hoặc kỷ niệm liên quan.Ví dụ cải thiện: 1) Mở đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp: “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.” 2) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể: ai tặng, màu sắc hoặc nơi bạn thường đi, kỷ niệm ngắn. 3) Dùng liên từ đơn để nối ý (because, so, and).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me as a birthday present, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it around our neighborhood every afternoon, which gave me a lot of freedom and happy memories.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp chính xác và cung cấp lý do cụ thể, có liên kết logic giữa các câu. Tránh dịch word-by-word; nói rõ ai và vì sao sử dụng xe đạp (ví dụ: học sinh, công nhân, tiết kiệm tiền, tiện lợi). Sử dụng từ nối như “because”, “so”, “for example”. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people find them affordable and convenient. For example, students and office workers often ride bicycles to school or work to avoid traffic and save money. As a result, you can see many bicycles parked near markets and stations.

× Yet I had, if I remember correctly, when I would try my father's gift, gift me a present. Umm, this present Awards of Pascal.

✓ Yes, I had one, if I remember correctly; my father gave it to me as a present called 'Pascal Award'.

The original sentence has confused word order and unnecessary words, making it hard to understand. Use a clear subject-verb-object order: 'I had one' and 'my father gave it to me'. Remove filler words and correct tense: 'gave' (past) for a past event. Use punctuation to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: keep sentences simple and follow Subject + Verb + Object structure. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Definitely in my country has allowed up bicycle on the street.

✓ Bicycles are definitely common on the streets in my country.

The original sentence mixes incorrect word order and extra words ('has allowed up'). Use a passive or simple present construction to state a general fact: 'Bicycles are common' or 'Bicycles are allowed'. Place modifiers ('in my country', 'on the streets') in appropriate positions. Suggestion: use 'are' for general present-state descriptions and maintain natural word order: Subject + Verb + Complement. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× The main reason for this is does They often ride a bicycle to SSI or go to work.

✓ The main reason is that people often ride bicycles to school or to work.

The original sentence has incorrect insertion of 'does' and wrong pronoun capitalization and form ('They' mid-sentence). Also 'SSI' is likely 'school' and needs correct noun. Use 'is that' to introduce a clause explaining a reason, and use 'people' or 'they' consistently with lowercase. Keep verb tense simple present for habitual actions: 'often ride'. Suggestion: use 'is that' + clause and ensure subjects and verbs agree and are in correct order. Grammar problem type ID: 26