Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and add one clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense/grammar, and use one linking word to add a detail such as why you liked it or a memory. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I shared a blue bike with my older brother when I was a child, and we used to race around our neighborhood every weekend. As a result, I remember it fondly because it gave me freedom and fun with my brother.

提案: Give a clear, organized answer and avoid filler words. Start with a direct opinion, then provide one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'also'). Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'bike lanes' or 'bicycle parking') and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and ample bicycle parking. Also, cycling is encouraged as an affordable and eco-friendly way to travel, so a lot of people use bikes for short trips.

× I have a older brother and we shared the bike.

✓ I have an older brother and we shared the bike.

The error is using the indefinite article 'a' before a word beginning with a vowel sound. 'Older' begins with a vowel sound, so the correct article is 'an'. Suggestion: use 'an' before words that start with vowel sounds (a, e, i, o, u).

× I believe I remember it was a blue one and I really liked it.

✓ I believe I remember that it was a blue one and I really liked it.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs the conjunction 'that' to link 'remember' and the clause, which is common in English for clarity. Also the tense sequence is consistent (remember/was/liked). Suggestion: include 'that' after verbs like 'remember' for clearer structure: 'I remember that it was...'.

× There is space for I mean the parking for bicycles and the load for pythicos and yeah, it was popular and it is popular too.

✓ There is space for parking bicycles, and bike lanes are common, so cycling was popular and still is.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect phrases ('the load for pythicos' seems to be an error). I clarified to 'parking bicycles' (correct noun phrase) and replaced the unknown phrase with 'bike lanes are common' to express infrastructure. I also corrected tense consistency: 'was popular and still is' fits past and present. Suggestion: simplify and use clear noun phrases ('parking for bicycles', 'bike lanes') and keep tense parallelism when comparing past and present.