Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student simply repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. To improve, answer directly with a clear topic sentence (yes/no), then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Keep it natural and avoid repetition. For example, mention when you had it, who gave it, how often you used it, and a reason or short memory.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used it every weekend to ride with my friends around the neighborhood.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is disfluent and a little repetitive. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, smoother linking words, and one specific supporting detail or example. Remove filler words (uh, um) and use more precise vocabulary (common, widely used, reduce commuting costs). Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and commuting. For example, in cities with heavy traffic, many commuters prefer cycling since it is cheaper and faster for journeys under five kilometers.

× Here bikes are popular in our country, a lot of people are using bike and. Umm, it's, uh, it cuts transportation costs.

✓ Bikes are popular in our country. A lot of people use bikes, and they save on transportation costs.

The original contains multiple problems: run-on sentence, improper word order, wrong verb forms, and missing plural/subject agreement. According to the 'Sentence structure errors' type, break the run-on into two sentences or use a proper conjunction. 'Here bikes are popular in our country' is awkward; move 'here' or omit it: 'Bikes are popular in our country.' 'A lot of people are using bike' uses incorrect progressive form and singular noun; general habits use simple present: 'A lot of people use bikes.' The final fragment 'and. Umm, it's, uh, it cuts transportation costs' is disfluent and uses 'it cuts' where 'they save on' or 'they reduce' is better. Use 'they save on transportation costs' to refer to people or 'bikes reduce transportation costs' to refer to bikes. Suggest practicing combining short, clear clauses, using simple present for habitual actions, and ensuring nouns agree in number with verbs.