Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct basic grammar (e.g., "started to practice" not "started to practicing") and remove repetitions.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I wasn't very keen on riding it at first. However, when my father organised friendly races with my brother, I practised regularly and gradually became more confident on two wheels.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words accurately, and provide a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating words ("because because"). Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "primary school children" instead of "elementary students") and correct phrasing ("after school" not "after the school").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many primary school children cycle home or play on bikes after school. For example, I often see groups of children riding around the neighbourhood playground in the late afternoon.

× I started to practicing by by how to ride a bike a lot.

✓ I started practicing how to ride a bike a lot.

The verb 'start' can be followed by either the infinitive (to practice) or the gerund (practicing), but not a combination 'to practicing'. Remove 'to' and the duplicate 'by' to form the correct gerund phrase. Also remove the extra 'by' and reorder to 'practicing how to ride a bike' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'started practicing' or 'started to practice', and avoid repeating words.

× all elementary students are cycling a lot after the school and they hang around in the playground.

✓ all elementary students cycle a lot after school and hang around in the playground.

The phrase 'after the school' is incorrect here; general time expressions with school usually omit the article: 'after school'. Also 'are cycling a lot' is grammatically possible but less natural for a habitual action; use simple present 'cycle' for habitual activities. Removing the auxiliary 'are' makes the sentence clearer. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions: 'students cycle a lot after school'.

× Therefore the bike is pretty popular.

✓ Therefore bikes are pretty popular.

Using 'the bike' suggests a specific single bike, which is incorrect when referring to bicycles in general. Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are' to indicate general popularity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns without articles for general statements about a category: 'Bikes are pretty popular.'