Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời có vài lỗi về ngữ pháp, lặp từ và thông tin không nhất quán ("child" nhưng "17 years old"). Nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, sửa lỗi số tuổi và dùng liên từ/phrases để nối ý. Cụ thể: xác định tuổi khi có xe (ví dụ 7 hoặc 17), tránh lặp từ, dùng thì quá khứ đúng (e.g. "used to ride"), và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi đi, cảm giác, tần suất) để làm câu đầy đủ nhưng vẫn ngắn gọn.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon. I especially enjoyed racing down the small hill near our house.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngôn ngữ (ví dụ "I think I buy a popular", "use by far"). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp. Tránh tiếng lặp và tiếng ấp úng; dùng cấu trúc đơn giản như "Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country" và giải thích vì sao (ví dụ: tiết kiệm, tiện lợi, giao thông).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them to get to school or work every day. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, especially in crowded city areas.

× Yes, I had a bike when I when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence repeats 'when I' which is a redundancy and disrupts tense clarity. Remove the extra 'when I' to make a correct past-tense statement. Suggestion: read aloud to catch duplicated phrases.

× My parents bought it for me when I was 17 years old and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends very afternoon.

✓ My parents bought it for me when I was 7 years old and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends every afternoon.

There are two issues: incorrect age likely '7' not '17' for childhood (content) and 'very afternoon' is ungrammatical. 'Used to' correctly marks past habitual action (past tense). Replace 'very' with the adverb 'every' to indicate frequency. Also ensure the age fits childhood context.

× Yes, I think I buy a popular in my country because every day I can see, uh, many people use by far, uh, go to school, go to work and.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because every day I can see many people using them to go to school or to go to work.

Multiple errors: 'I think I buy a popular' is ungrammatical—incorrect sentence structure; 'bikes are popular' is the correct noun phrase and verb agreement. 'Many people use by far' is incorrect; replace with 'many people using them'. Use the gerund 'using' after 'see' when observing an action in progress. Complete the coordination with 'or' rather than ending with 'and'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word order. Suggestion: form the main clause 'I think bikes are popular' then give supporting observation with 'because'.