Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and grammatical but very short and lacks supporting details. To improve, provide a topic sentence plus 1–2 specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, what kind of bike it was, where you rode it, or a brief memory). Use a linking word if adding more than one detail (for example, “and” or “because”). Keep the total to no more than 4–5 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “owned,” “rode,” “childhood,” “memorable”).

例: Yes, I used to have a small red bicycle when I was a child. It was a gift from my parents, and I rode it around the neighborhood every afternoon after school.

提案: You answer the question and give a reason, which is good, but the reply is slightly wordy and could be more specific. Improve by stating your main idea clearly, then add one or two concrete supporting details (for example, safety concerns, lack of lanes, or climate). Use concise linking words like “because” or “for example,” and vary vocabulary (e.g., “widespread,” “infrastructure,” “cycling lanes”). Avoid filler phrases such as “first of all” unless you will list multiple points. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don't think cycling is widespread in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes. For example, many streets lack safe cycling infrastructure, so people prefer cars or public transport instead.

× I don't think it's popular in my country because first of all, the accessibility is not that good when it comes to bike roads.

✓ I don't think bikes are popular in my country because, first of all, the accessibility of bike lanes is not very good.

The original sentence mixes 'it' with the plural noun 'bikes', causing a reference/pronoun mismatch and unclear subject. This falls under third person singular issue (ID 2) because 'it' incorrectly stands for 'bikes' which are plural; additionally the phrase 'bike roads' is nonstandard. Correction replaces 'it' with 'bikes' to match plurality and changes 'bike roads' to the more natural 'bike lanes.' Use 'not very good' instead of 'not that good' for slightly more formal clarity. Suggestion: keep pronouns and verbs agreeing in number with their antecedents and use standard collocations like 'bike lanes' or 'cycling infrastructure.'