Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), reduce redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words for clarity and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Be specific about age, reason, and how often you used the bike.

例: Yes. When I was six, my parents bought me a bicycle because my primary school was about one kilometre from home. I used it every day to go to and from school, which saved time and made the journey more enjoyable.

提案: Clarify unclear phrases, correct vocabulary and grammar, and structure answer: give a direct opinion, then two distinct supporting points with linking words. Use specific examples (rural vs urban, brands or purposes) and avoid filler words.

例: I think bicycles are still fairly common, but popularity varies. In rural areas many students cycle to school because distances are short, whereas in cities people often cycle for exercise or leisure rather than daily transport.

× When I were six years old, my parents bought me a new bicycle because that time I go, I went to primary school that is about 1 kilometer from my house.

✓ When I was six years old, my parents bought me a new bicycle because at that time I went to primary school, which was about one kilometer from my house.

Errors: 'were' should be past tense singular 'was' for 'I' (subject-verb agreement/past tense). 'that time I go, I went' mixes tenses and is ungrammatical; use 'at that time I went' to keep past tense consistent. Use a relative clause 'which was about one kilometer' to describe the school. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense for past events and use correct singular past form 'was'.

× So I need a, you know, a vehicle to everyday to go to school.

✓ So I needed, you know, a vehicle to go to school every day.

Errors: 'need' is present tense while context is past (past tense issue); change to 'needed'. Word order and extra 'to' are incorrect: 'a vehicle to everyday to go' should be 'a vehicle to go to school every day.' 'Every day' is two words and should follow the verb phrase. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past events and use correct word order: 'needed a vehicle to go to school every day.'

× At least Big King Bi recently is not very popular in Vietnam, but in rural areas we still see a lot of student you bikes to go to school or in some city people you bike to, you know, at a sport to improve fitness.

✓ At least Big King Bi is not very popular in Vietnam recently, but in rural areas we still see a lot of students using bikes to go to school, and in some cities people ride bikes, you know, for sport to improve fitness.

Errors: word order and tense: 'recently is not very popular' is awkward; better 'is not very popular in Vietnam recently.' 'student' should be plural 'students' (singular/plural issue). 'you bikes' and 'you bike to' appear to be errors from 'use bikes' and 'ride bikes' (verb choice and form). Use 'using bikes' for continuous action and 'ride bikes' for general activity. 'city' should be plural 'cities' when contrasting with 'rural areas.' Suggestion: correct plural forms, use appropriate verbs ('use' or 'ride') and place adverb 'recently' after main verb or at sentence end for natural word order.