Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and directly answers the question with a topic sentence and supporting detail. To improve, make the response slightly more specific (e.g., mention your age or where you rode) and avoid filler words. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it with my best friend every afternoon around the park near our houses. We often raced down the hill and stopped to chat by the pond, which made those afternoons very memorable.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is weakened by hesitations, unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Improve by removing fillers, using clearer sentence structure and a linking word to organise points. Provide one or two specific reasons or an example (e.g., safety, convenience, exercise) to support your opinion.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children own bikes because they are an inexpensive way to get exercise and meet friends; for example, after school kids often cycle to the local playground together.

× They use the bike to spend time with their best friends and umm exploring their neighborhood together.

✓ They use the bike to spend time with their best friends and explore their neighborhood together.

This sentence incorrectly mixes an infinitive phrase ('to spend') with a gerund ('exploring') in a coordinated structure. When joining two verbs after the same auxiliary or preposition, they should share the same form. Here, use the base form 'explore' to parallel 'spend': 'to spend ... and explore'. This keeps verb forms consistent and grammatically correct.

× So I think it's a good activity since outdoor than rather than UMM sitting indoor and using UMM.

✓ So I think it's a good activity because it gets people outdoors rather than sitting indoors and using devices.

The original sentence misuses 'since', 'outdoor', 'than rather than', and 'indoor' and is unclear. Use 'because' to give a reason. 'Outdoor' and 'indoor' should be adjectives used as 'outdoors' (adverb) or 'outdoor activity'; here 'outdoors' fits ('gets people outdoors'). Use the comparative connector 'rather than' followed by a gerund phrase 'sitting indoors'. Also clarify 'using UMM' to a specific object like 'using devices'. This revision corrects prepositions and word forms and improves clarity.

× Yes, I think so many kids nowadays own a bike UMM.

✓ Yes, I think many kids nowadays own bikes.

The sentence mixes plural 'kids' with singular 'a bike', which is inconsistent. When referring generally to many children each owning one, use the plural 'bikes'. Also remove filler 'UMM'. This resolves number agreement between subject and object.