Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are small grammar and phrasing issues and one sentence is slightly repetitive. To improve, begin with a concise topic sentence, correct minor grammar (e.g. add article and preposition), vary sentence openings with linking words, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific vivid detail to make the response more engaging.

例: Yes. I had a small blue bike with training wheels when I was a child. My parents bought it for me, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends. Because it was close to school, I often rode it almost every afternoon after class, which was fun and gave me a chance to play outside.

提案: This is a good direct answer with a clear reason and an example. Improve by correcting small grammar (plural forms and articles), using a linking word to connect reason and example, and adding one specific statistic or a contrasting point to enrich content. Use slightly wider vocabulary (e.g. convenient, commute) to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short commutes. For example, many students and low-income workers ride bicycles to school or the local market, and in some cities you can even see dedicated bike lanes that make cycling safer.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child and it was a small blue bike with training wheels.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and it was a small blue bike with training wheels.

Missing the article 'a' before 'child' makes the sentence ungrammatical; also two independent clauses should be joined with a comma and conjunction. Suggestion: use 'a child' and include a comma before 'and' to join the clauses correctly.

× My parents bought for me and I rode it around the neighborhood with my friends.

✓ My parents bought it for me, and I rode it around the neighborhood with my friends.

The verb 'bought' requires a direct object (what was bought) followed by 'for me' if indicating the beneficiary. The original omits the object. Also two independent clauses need punctuation. Suggestion: include the object 'it', place 'for me' after it, and add a comma before 'and'.

× For example, many students and workers ride bike to school or the market.

✓ For example, many students and workers ride bikes to school or the market.

Countable noun 'bike' in this general statement should be plural 'bikes' to match 'many'. Also when talking about habitual present actions, plural form is required. Suggestion: use 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike' depending on emphasis; here 'ride bikes' matches 'many'.