Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Улучшите грамматику и структуру ответа: сначала дайте краткий прямой ответ, затем добавьте 1–2 предложения с конкретными деталями. Избегайте повторов и вопросов в середине ответа. Используйте правильные времена (прошедшее для воспоминаний) и согласование подлежащего и сказуемого. Например, замените «I don't have» на «I didn't have», «I very wanted» на «I really wanted», и перестройте фразы: «My parents said I was a girl, so I should play with dolls.»

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I really wanted one, but my parents gave bikes to my brother instead because they thought girls should play with dolls while boys played with bikes and cars.

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на ясности и точности: начните с прямого короткого ответа, затем приведите конкретные причины или наблюдения. Исправьте грамматические ошибки и употребление времен (например, «will have» не подходит для текущего состояния). Используйте связки: «because», «for example», «so».

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. There are many dedicated bike lanes, and I see people cycling every day, especially commuting to work and school.

× No, I don't have a bike, but I very wanted my brother have a bike and I ask my parents why?

✓ No, I didn't have a bike, but I really wanted my brother to have a bike and I asked my parents why.

The student mixes present and past tenses. Use past simple for past situations: 'didn't have' and 'asked'. 'Very wanted' is incorrect; use the adverb 'really wanted'. After 'wanted' the correct structure is 'wanted someone to do something', so 'wanted my brother to have a bike'. Also use a statement with proper punctuation rather than a question tag 'why?' at the end of the clause.

× They tell me because you're a girl and your brother a boy.

✓ They told me, 'Because you're a girl and your brother is a boy.'

Pronoun and verb forms must match tense and clause structure. In reported or quoted speech from the past use past tense 'told'. Inside the quotation, a complete clause needs the verb 'is' for 'your brother is a boy'. Without 'is' the sentence is ungrammatical.

× Girl, I need to play with a doll and a boy we need to play with a bike, skateboards or cars.

✓ They said girls should play with dolls and boys should play with bikes, skateboards or cars.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and lacks agreement. Use a clear subject-verb structure: 'girls should play' and 'boys should play'. Also use plural 'girls' and 'boys' for general statements and parallel structure for the list 'bikes, skateboards or cars'.

× Yeah, I think yes, my country will have many bike road and I see everyday that many people ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I think so. My country has many bike lanes and I see every day that many people ride bikes.

Tense and word choice issues: 'will have' is unnecessary for a general present-fact statement; use present simple 'has'. 'Bike road' is incorrect collocation; 'bike lanes' or 'bicycle lanes' is natural. 'Everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverb) — use 'every day'. Use plural 'ride bikes' for general statements.

× It's a very popular in my country.

✓ They're very popular in my country.

Agreement and word choice errors: 'It' does not refer to countable plural 'bikes' or 'bike lanes'. Use 'They're' or 'They are' for plural. Alternatively 'It's very popular' could work if referring to cycling in general, but then 'very popular' needs no article. Here plural agreement 'They're very popular' fits the previous sentence. 'Very' modifies the adjective 'popular' correctly.