Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid absolute claims like "the only way" and check verb tense and article use.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was my main way to get around the neighbourhood, and I used it every day to visit friends and go to the local shop. Because I lived close to school, cycling saved me time and made me more independent.

提案: Answer directly, then support with clear, linked reasons and specific examples. Improve fluency by removing awkward pauses and fixing grammar (e.g. "younger people own fewer cars"), and avoid starting with "My country is..." unless necessary.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in Japan. In recent years, many young people own fewer cars because parking is expensive in cities, so they choose bicycles for short trips. For example, students and office workers often cycle to stations or nearby shops to save money and time.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike because it is the only way to go around by myself.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike because it was the only way to get around by myself.

The sentence mixes past ('was', 'had') with present ('is'). Maintain past tense for past situations. Also, 'go around' is less natural than 'get around' in this context. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and prefer 'get around' for traveling locally.

× My country is Japan and the answer is yes because recently. Younger people get less cars because it's too expensive to park.

✓ My country is Japan, and the answer is yes, because recently younger people have fewer cars since parking is too expensive.

The original contains a fragmented sentence ('because recently.') and incorrect quantifier use ('get less cars'). Fix sentence structure by combining clauses, use 'have fewer cars' for countable plural (fewer not less), and use 'since' or 'because' to link the parking reason. Also change 'it's' to 'parking is' for clarity.