Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and better structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., 'loved riding it' instead of 'loved when I ride it'). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences).

例: Yes, I did — I had my own bicycle when I was a child. In fact, my parents bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood every afternoon. Because I rode so often, I became quite confident and could ride without training wheels within a week.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating personal memory as the main evidence. Use linking words to add a clear reason or example, correct grammar (e.g., 'everyone had one' and 'it was very popular'), and be specific about who uses bikes and why. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many children and adults use bicycles for short trips and exercise because they are cheap and convenient, especially in smaller towns.

× Yes, when I was a little kid I got my own bike of course, and I loved when I ride it.

✓ Yes, when I was a little kid I got my own bike, of course, and I loved when I rode it.

The sentence mixes past simple ('got', 'loved') with present tense 'ride'. Use past tense 'rode' to maintain consistent past narration. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same time frame when describing past events (use 'rode' instead of 'ride').

× Yes, uh, I still remember when I have my own bike, everyone got it likes it's very popular and umm.

✓ Yes, uh, I still remember when I had my own bike; everyone had one, so it was very popular.

The clause 'I have' is present tense but the context requires past tense 'I had' because the memory refers to the past. 'Everyone got it likes' is ungrammatical: 'got' is awkward here for possession and 'likes' is incorrect form; use 'everyone had one' to indicate common possession. 'It's very popular' should be past 'it was very popular' to match the past context. Also punctuation adjusted for clarity. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when talking about past memories and use 'have/had' for possession rather than 'get/got' unless indicating receiving.