Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, more concise, and better organized. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb tenses and word order, avoid redundancy, and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me so I could ride along the waterfront, which I loved because it felt exciting and free. I often rode with friends on weekends, and those memories are still very vivid.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific reasons with clear linking words and correct vocabulary. Use precise terms (e.g., "shared bikes" or "public bike-sharing systems") and correct phrasing for costs and frequency. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because of extensive bike-sharing systems. For example, many cities offer shared bikes that are free for short rides or cost around ten dollars per hour, making cycling an affordable and convenient option for daily travel.

× Yeah, I do have a bike when I was a child because I want to play a lot of things that my dad buy me a bicycle for me to cycle around the waterfront that was so funny.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I wanted to do a lot of things, and my dad bought me a bicycle so I could ride around the waterfront; it was so much fun.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'do have' is present tense but the time frame is past (when I was a child) so use past simple 'had' (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'I want' should be past 'I wanted' to match the past time frame (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'my dad buy me' is incorrect; use past simple 'my dad bought me' (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'for me to cycle' is awkward; use 'so I could ride' (verb form and clarity). Also 'that was so funny' is unnatural for a pleasurable memory; 'it was so much fun' is more idiomatic (adjective choice). Suggestion: keep verbs in the past when referring to past events, ensure subject-verb agreement in past tense, and choose idiomatic expressions for feelings.

× Yeah, I do think bikes are popular in my country because there are many mobile bikes or public bike for citizens to cycle like they can cycle for this bike for free or like ten or ten dollars for an hour and that was a cheap trip.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country because there are many shared or public bikes for citizens to use; they can ride some for free or pay around ten dollars per hour, which is a cheap option.

Tense and phrasing issues: overall present tense 'do think' is fine for a general opinion, but several noun and verb form errors occur. 'mobile bikes or public bike' should be 'shared or public bikes' (plural and word choice) (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 13). 'for citizens to cycle like they can cycle for this bike' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'for citizens to use; they can ride some for free' (sentence structure and verb use) (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 8). 'ten or ten dollars' is redundant; 'around ten dollars' is clear (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'that was a cheap trip' mixes past 'was' with present context; use 'which is a cheap option' to match present general statement (Grammar Problem Type 6). Suggestion: keep consistent tense for general statements (present), use plural nouns for general references, avoid repetition, and choose concise phrases.