Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically correct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., "Yes, I did."). Then add one or two brief supporting details (age, who gave it to you, or a memory). Avoid unnecessary words and tense errors. Use linking words if you add more than one detail (e.g., "and", "so").

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven from my parents, and I spent every afternoon riding around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific, relevant details. Avoid fillers and unclear figures. Use correct grammar ("are popular", "many people have"). Use a linking word to add an example or reason (e.g., "because", "for example"). Keep answers concise and natural (max 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and exercise. For example, in cities you often see commuters and students riding bikes to save time and money.

× Yes, I have it right when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' while referring to a past time 'when I was a child'; this is a tense error. Also 'it' is vague and 'one' (a bike) is more natural. Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference: 'I had one when I was a child.' Avoid unnecessary words like 'right' here. Suggestion: Replace present-tense verbs with past-tense forms when speaking about past events and use clear nouns (one/a bike) instead of vague pronouns.

× Uh, yes, I think the uh, 5% very popular in my gentleness.

✓ Uh, yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country; maybe about 50%.

The original sentence misuses '5%' which is unlikely and unclear, and 'gentleness' is the wrong noun. This is primarily a word choice/quantifier error. Also sentence structure is awkward. Correct by stating the general opinion first ('bikes are very popular') and, if giving a statistic, use a plausible quantifier ('about 50%'). Use 'country' instead of 'gentleness.' Suggestion: State the general idea clearly before optional statistics, use correct nouns for context, and choose realistic quantifiers.

× Uh, everyone have has own a bike.

✓ Uh, everyone has their own bike.

'Everyone' is singular and requires a singular verb form 'has'; the sentence contained both 'have' and 'has' and incorrect word order 'own a bike.' Also use 'their' as a gender-neutral possessive determiner and place it before 'own bike.' Suggestion: Match verbs to singular indefinite pronouns (everyone/has), remove duplicate verbs, and use correct possessive structure 'their own bike.'