Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a more informative topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Mention when you had it, what it looked like, or a brief memory to make the answer more natural and interesting.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight years old. It had training wheels at first, but I learned to ride without them after a few weeks, and I used to cycle to my friend’s house almost every afternoon.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons or examples linked with connecting words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., commuting, convenient) and avoid vague phrases like "our location."

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes because they are convenient and often faster than cars in crowded urban areas, especially during rush hour.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because it's easy to ride and faster to reach our location.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are easy to ride and faster for reaching destinations.

The original sentence uses inconsistent and incorrect pronouns and reference: 'our country' and 'our location' should match the speaker's perspective; 'my country' is more natural when speaking about one's own country. 'It' refers to a singular noun but 'bikes' is plural, so use 'they are'. Also 'faster to reach our location' is awkward: use 'faster for reaching destinations' or 'they are faster for getting to places'. Suggestions: use consistent first-person reference ('my'), match number between subject and pronoun ('bikes' -> 'they'), and use a natural prepositional phrase for purpose or result ('faster for getting to places' or 'faster to get around').