Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a clear, direct response (topic sentence), then add one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers natural, concise (max 5 sentences), and use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle with training wheels because my parents wanted me to learn safely, and I used it to ride to the park every weekend. As a result, I became confident riding without help by the age of seven.

提案: Your answer is direct but could be improved by adding a clear topic sentence, varied vocabulary, and a specific example or reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating "because" twice; use one linking word and expand with a brief example or statistic.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheaper to buy and maintain than cars. For example, many commuters in my city cycle to work to avoid traffic and save money on fuel, especially during rush hour.

× Yes because many people here are seen riding a bike rather than a car because it's more economical.

✓ Yes, because many people here are seen riding bikes rather than cars since it's more economical.

The sentence uses singular count nouns 'a bike' and 'a car' to refer to people in general; this creates a number mismatch. Use plural nouns 'bikes' and 'cars' when making a general statement about many people. Also replace the second 'because' with 'since' or restructure the sentence to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use plural forms for generalizations and avoid repeating 'because'.