Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and concise supporting details. Begin by saying simply that you didn’t own a bike, then give one or two specific details (how you borrowed bikes, how often, and a short reason). Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (scooter, not scooty; bike, not bite). Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use a linking word like “so” or “therefore.”

例: No, I didn’t own a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed one from a neighbour on weekends, so I could ride around the park. Sometimes I used a small scooter to go short distances, because my family couldn’t afford a bike at that time.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give specific reasons and a short example. Fix grammar (plural/singular agreement, use ‘young people’), avoid repetition, and use linking words (for example, because, therefore). Mention one or two concrete reasons why bikes are popular (cost, convenience, parking) and a brief example of college students. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Young people often prefer them because they are affordable and easy to park, especially in crowded cities. For example, many college students ride bikes to campus since they are cheaper than cars and do not require a driver’s license at a young age.

× No, I didn't have a bike as when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase 'as when' is redundant and incorrect in this context. Use 'when' to indicate the time period. Remove 'as' to make the sentence grammatically correct and natural.

× So I used to borrow from my neighbours to ride a bike or I ride or scooty rather than bite?

✓ So I used to borrow a bike from my neighbours to ride, or I would ride a scooter instead of a bicycle.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect word choices ('scooty' and 'bite' instead of 'scooter' and 'bike/bicycle'), awkward verb forms and structure. 'Used to borrow a bike' is correct; follow with 'from my neighbours'. Use 'would' to indicate habitual past alternatives ('would ride a scooter'). Replace informal/incorrect nouns with standard words ('scooter', 'bicycle'). Ensure clear parallel structure.

× As bikes are very popular in my country like mostly youngster likes to ride a bike and going colleges by using bikes because they don't get license of car in that age.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country. Most young people like to ride bikes and go to college by bike because they are not old enough to get a car license.

Original sentence uses awkward 'As' and 'like', incorrect singular/plural ('youngster' vs 'young people'), subject-verb agreement ('youngster likes'), and incorrect phrasing ('going colleges by using bikes', 'don't get license of car in that age'). Split into two sentences for clarity, use 'most young people' and plural verbs, and rephrase 'not old enough to get a car license' to convey the intended meaning.

× So they used to ride a bike and ride a bike and they all enjoy.

✓ So they used to ride bikes, and they all enjoyed it.

The repetition 'ride a bike and ride a bike' is redundant. Mix of past ('used to') and present ('enjoy') is inconsistent. Since describing habitual past behavior, use past tense: 'used to' and 'enjoyed'. Also use plural 'bikes' to match 'they'.