Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. To improve, make it slightly more natural and add one short supporting detail. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word for coherence. For example, briefly explain why you didn't have one or what you used instead.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school or took a rickshaw because my family couldn’t afford one at the time.

提案: Your response addresses the question but is repetitive and a bit disorganized. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting reasons, and linking words to connect ideas. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g. 'personalized transportation systems', 'traffic jams').

例: I think bikes are less popular now. Many people prefer motorbikes, auto-rickshaws or cars because cities are crowded; as a result, traffic jams and safety concerns make cycling less common.

× No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence is already correct. It uses the past simple negative 'didn't have' to describe possession in childhood, which matches the past time reference 'when I was a child'. No change needed.

× To be honest, there are many personalized transportation system available in our country and they are more popular than bikes I would say because it is a it is like a more crowded country and there are lots of cars in the street which gives a huge amount of jam I would say particularly.

✓ To be honest, there are many personalized transportation systems available in our country, and they are more popular than bikes, I would say, because it is a more crowded country and there are lots of cars in the streets which cause severe traffic jams, particularly.

Multiple issues matched items from the provided list: singular and plural issue (use 'systems' not 'system'), incorrect use of articles/wording ('a it is like' is redundant and incorrect), incorrect use of prepositions and nouns ('in the street' -> 'in the streets'), subject-verb agreement/verb meaning ('gives a huge amount of jam' -> 'cause severe traffic jams'), and sentence structure (run-on and repetition). Corrections: pluralize 'system' to 'systems' to agree with 'many'; remove redundant filler 'a it is like' and simplify to 'it is a more crowded country'; change 'in the street' to 'in the streets' for general traffic; replace 'gives a huge amount of jam' with 'cause severe traffic jams' for natural collocation and correct subject-verb relation; add commas to separate clauses and improve readability. Suggestions for improvement: keep noun numbers consistent with quantifiers (many + plural), avoid filler repetitions, use natural collocations for traffic (traffic jam/traffic jams), and break long sentences into clearer clauses.