Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 개선하십시오. 현재 답변은 문법 오류(예: 'have my bike' 대신 'have a bike')와 부적절한 표현('didn't know how to take a bike'는 의미 불명확)을 포함합니다. 먼저 질문에 직접적인 주제 문장을 사용한 뒤, 이유를 설명할 때는 명확한 동사와 간결한 연결어를 사용하세요. 예를 들어 과거 습관이나 능력 부족을 말할 때는 'couldn't ride' 또는 'didn't know how to ride'를 사용하고, 추가 정보를 줄 때는 because, so, therefore 같은 연결어로 문장을 연결하세요. 또한 답변은 1~4문장으로 제한하고 불필요한 중복을 피하세요.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I couldn't ride one. I tried once when I was about seven, but I couldn't keep my balance, so my parents decided not to buy one for me. As a result, I usually walked to school or took the bus.

提案: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 문법과 문장 연결에 문제가 있습니다. 단수/복수와 지시대명사 사용을 주의하세요('Yes, they are' 또는 'Yes, cycling is popular'). 구체적인 이유나 예를 덧붙일 때는 연결어(For example, Because, Also)를 사용해 논리적 흐름을 만드세요. 또한 문장을 끝까지 완성해 불완전한 발화를 피하고, 구체적 통계나 상황(예: 출퇴근, 마트 가기 등)을 들어 설명하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, cycling is very popular in my country. Many people use bikes for short trips, such as going to the supermarket or commuting to work, because it is cheap and convenient. For example, in my city there are many bike lanes and rental services, so more people choose to ride rather than drive.

× No, I didn't have my bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to take a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride a bike.

The student used 'take a bike' which is incorrect collocation in English; the correct verb for using a bicycle is 'ride'. Also 'my bike' implies ownership not established; 'a bike' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'ride a bike' to describe operating a bicycle and use 'a bike' when speaking generally about not having one.

× Yes, it is. A lot of people usually ride a bike and they go to the supermarket writing that and I used to

✓ Yes, they are. A lot of people usually ride bikes to go to the supermarket, and I used to as well.

Several issues: 'it is' wrongly refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they are'. 'A bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. The phrase 'writing that' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended 'to go' or 'to buy things' — corrected to 'to go to the supermarket'. The original sentence is also incomplete; added 'and I used to as well' to finish the thought. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches noun (they for plural), use plural nouns for general statements, and avoid literal translations like 'writing that' — use clear infinitive phrases like 'to go' or 'to buy groceries'.