Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two brief supporting details (where you rode it or who taught you). Use past tense consistently for childhood events and avoid unnecessary words. Keep it to a maximum of 3–4 short sentences and include a linking word if adding details.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was a child, and I rode it around my neighborhood every afternoon. My older brother taught me to balance, so I learned to ride quickly.

提案: Answer directly and use clear sentence structure. Begin with a short opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct grammar (plural/singular, tense). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “two goals went went.” Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many students use them to travel to school. For example, I often see groups of students riding bikes in the morning, which is cheaper and faster than taking a bus.

× Yeah, actually I was young. I have bicycle.

✓ Yeah, when I was young, I had a bicycle.

The original contains a tense and verb choice problem. 'I was young' is fine but lacks a connector; 'I have bicycle' incorrectly uses present tense and lacks an article. The student is referring to the past, so use past tense 'had' and include the article 'a'. Also add a time connector 'when' for natural phrasing.

× I think in my country bikes are popular two goals went went to go to school.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because many people use them to go to school.

The original sentence has word order and word choice problems and uses 'two goals went went' which is incorrect. The intended idea is likely that bikes are commonly used for going to school. Replace the phrase with 'many people use them to go to school' to express frequency and purpose correctly. This fixes quantifier/word choice and sentence structure.

× I saw the student who ride bikes.

✓ I saw students who ride bikes.

There is a subject-verb agreement and article/noun number issue. 'The student who ride' mixes singular 'student' with plural verb 'ride'. Either make both singular ('the student who rides') if referring to one, or pluralize the noun and keep 'ride'. Given context (general observation), 'students who ride bikes' is more natural. Also drop 'the' unless referring to specific students.