Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the tense and grammar correct, give a clear topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. It was a red bicycle my parents gave me for my tenth birthday, and I used it every day to visit friends and go to the park. Because it was light and easy to ride, I learned to do simple tricks and felt very proud of it.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words. Correct grammar and avoid filler words. Explain what makes bikes popular (e.g., convenience, shared bikes) and how people use them.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. In particular, shared bicycles are everywhere, so people can quickly rent one by scanning a QR code; as a result, cycling is a convenient option for short trips and avoiding traffic.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and this bike is a birthday gift from my parents.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and that bike was a birthday gift from my parents.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Also change 'this bike is' to 'that bike was' to keep consistent past narration and use 'that' to refer back. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same past timeframe for past events and use clear pronouns (that) for previously mentioned items.

× I really like this bike.

✓ I really liked that bike.

This expresses a past preference tied to childhood; use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame 'when I was a child.' Use 'that' to refer to the previously mentioned bike. If the intention is to say the liking continues to present, keep present tense and say 'I still really like the bike.'

× Yes, I do. Uh, except the public transportation actually there has a lot, There have a lot of shared bicycles on the road, so we can just scan the QR code of the bike and then we can write it.

✓ Yes, I do. Aside from public transportation, there are actually a lot of shared bicycles on the road, so we can just scan the bike's QR code and then unlock it.

Multiple issues: awkward phrase 'except the public transportation' should be 'aside from public transportation' (preposition and phrasing). 'There has a lot' and 'There have a lot' are incorrect; use 'there are a lot' because 'a lot' is plural in meaning and matches plural 'bicycles' (subject-verb agreement). 'Scan the QR code of the bike' is better as 'scan the bike's QR code.' 'Then we can write it' is unclear; likely intended 'unlock it' or 'use it.' Suggestions: use 'there are' for plural existence, choose clear preposition phrases (aside from), and use verbs that match the intended action (unlock/use) rather than 'write.'