Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural but very brief. To improve, add one or two supporting details (reason or brief context) using a linking word to make it more informative and coherent. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family lived in a busy city and we used public transport instead. However, I sometimes borrowed my neighbor's bike to ride in the park at weekends.

提案: The answer gives an opinion but is slightly awkward and vague. Improve clarity by rephrasing the topic sentence and adding a specific reason or example with a linking word. Use more natural vocabulary (e.g., “common” or “widely used”) and correct phrasing such as “among” or “for” particular groups.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country, especially among students and commuters. For example, many people use bicycles to travel short distances because they are cheap, eco-friendly, and often faster than cars in congested areas.

× Yes, I do think bikes are popular in our country for the major transportation users.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in my country as a major means of transportation.

The original sentence has an awkward phrase 'for the major transportation users' which is not natural English. This is primarily a problem of incorrect pronoun/word choice and sentence structure (list IDs 12 and 26). 'Our country' is acceptable, but since the speaker is talking about themselves, 'my country' is more natural. 'Major means of transportation' is the correct collocation to express that bikes are widely used for transport. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('means of transportation') and choose the appropriate possessive ('my country') and smoother sentence connectors ('as a major').