Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and relevant: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”). Then give 1–2 specific supporting details (age when you got it, who gave it to you, how often you rode it). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences) and avoid filler words like “uh” or irrelevant phrases such as “when I'm tired.” Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “and”) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was six, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I rode it almost every day after school because my friends lived nearby and we liked to cycle together.

提案: Provide a clear opinion followed by specific, coherent reasons and correct grammar. Start with a concise topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.”). Then give 1–2 concrete reasons and, if possible, an example or brief statistic. Use correct subject–verb agreement and plural forms, and connect ideas with linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “also.” Avoid absolute statements unless supported.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, children often ride bikes to school and adults cycle to nearby shops; in many cities there are bike lanes and affordable bicycles, which makes cycling convenient and common.

× Yes, when I'm tired, yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The examiner asked about the past (when you were a child), so the student should use past tense. 'I'm tired' and 'I have a bike' are present tense and do not match the time frame. Use 'had' and 'was' for past reference. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time expression (use simple past for past time frames).

× It's uh, I have uh, two new lab only.

✓ It was new; I had two of them.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It mixes present and past and uses 'lab' (likely intended 'left' or 'last' or 'bike') and 'only' incorrectly. For clarity, state a complete past-tense sentence. Suggestion: Use a clear subject-verb-object structure and proper past tense verbs when talking about childhood possessions.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because every children have bikes and his home, so nobody is up to five years to 17 years, 60 year don't have a bike at home.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because every child has a bike at home, so people from about five to sixty years old usually have a bike.

Several tense and agreement problems: 'every children' should be singular 'every child', requiring singular verb 'has' (subject-verb agreement). Use consistent present simple for general facts. Phrases like 'his home' and 'nobody is up to five years to 17 years, 60 year don't have a bike at home' are ungrammatical and unclear. Suggestion: Use 'every child has a bike at home' and express age ranges with 'people from X to Y years old' or 'children aged 5 to 17'.

× So yes, I think it's so popular.

✓ So yes, I think bikes are very popular.

'It's so popular' is vague because the pronoun 'it' is unclear; better to repeat the noun 'bikes'. Also 'so popular' is informal—'very popular' is clearer. Suggestion: Use a clear subject and appropriate adjective ('very popular') when making general statements.