Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good: it responds directly, includes supporting details and is natural. To improve, make sentences more concise and vary sentence openings. Add one linking word to connect ideas smoothly and avoid small grammatical slips (e.g., use past tense consistently and say “it looked big on me, but I loved it” rather than “it was beautiful”). Aim for clearer subject-reference and reduce redundancy.

例: I had a tricycle when I was six, and later I rode my uncle's large red bicycle. Although it looked big on me, I loved it, so I rode it every summer around the neighborhood because I enjoyed exploring nearby streets.

提案: The idea is clear but the answer is disorganized and contains several unclear phrases and grammar errors. Improve by giving a direct topic sentence, then one or two clear reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'for example'). Avoid unclear expressions like “you can bite for some minutes” and finish your thought. Use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. Instead, many people prefer scooters because they are faster and more convenient; for example, you can hop on a scooter for a short trip to the market without much effort.

× Yes, I had a tricycle when I was six years old.

✓ Yes, I had a tricycle when I was six years old.

No change needed: sentence correctly uses past simple to describe a past possession and is grammatically correct.

× Later I used my uncle's large red bicycle.

✓ Later I used my uncle's large red bicycle.

No change needed: 'used' correctly indicates past habitual action. The sentence is grammatically correct.

× It looked big on me but it was beautiful and I rode it every summer because I enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood.

✓ It looked big on me, but it was beautiful, and I rode it every summer because I enjoyed cycling around the neighborhood.

Main issues are punctuation and clarity rather than grammar category list; subject-verb agreement is correct. Added commas to separate clauses for readability. Verbs 'looked', 'was', 'rode', 'enjoyed' consistently use past tense.

× Honestly, what I believe too, I don't think so.

✓ Honestly, I don't think so.

Original is redundant and awkward. 'What I believe too' is unnecessary and breaks sentence structure. Simplifying to 'Honestly, I don't think so' makes the opinion clear and grammatically correct.

× Here in my country, more popular scooters, I think, because they're faster and you have just walked on the road and see them and you can bite for some minutes and ride it without any hard

✓ Here in my country, scooters are more popular, I think, because they're faster: you can walk along the road and see them, and you can rent one for a few minutes and ride it without much effort.

Multiple errors: incorrect word order and missing verb ('scooters are more popular' fixes word order and adds verb), awkward clause 'you have just walked on the road and see them' should be 'you can walk along the road and see them' (modal + base verb for ability or possibility). 'you can bite for some minutes' uses wrong verb; likely intended 'rent' or 'hire' so corrected to 'rent one for a few minutes'. 'without any hard' is incorrect adjective use; corrected to 'without much effort'. Suggestions: use subject + verb order, appropriate modals (can), correct verbs (rent/hire), and idiomatic collocations ('walk along the road', 'a few minutes', 'much effort').