Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past tense (because question asks about childhood), then add one short supporting detail. Use linking words and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I often borrowed my cousin's bike so I could ride with friends after school.

提案: Give a direct opinion with correct sentence structure and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, however) and avoid hesitations like 'uh'. Be clear about whether you mean bicycles or motorbikes.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because most people prefer motorcycles for commuting. For example, motorcycles are faster in traffic and cheaper to buy and maintain than bicycles.

× No, I don't have a bike so I'm always bringing my cousin a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike, so I always borrowed my cousin's bike.

The question is about the past, so the verb tense should be past (didn't have). 'I'm always bringing' is present progressive and incorrect here; use a past habitual action expressed with 'always' plus past simple or 'used to'. Also 'bringing my cousin a bike' is wrong: the student meant using/borrowing the cousin's bike, so use 'borrowed my cousin's bike' and possessive form 'cousin's'. Use 'so' to connect clauses. Suggestion: say 'No, I didn't have a bike, so I always borrowed my cousin's bike.' Note: This correction addresses Present tense issue (ID 6) and Subject-verb/time reference consistency.

× Uh, actually I think not popular in my country, usually people. For bring the motorcycle.

✓ Uh, actually I think bicycles are not popular in my country; usually people use motorcycles.

The original has fragmented and misplaced parts. 'I think not popular in my country' lacks a subject and verb agreement and correct word order; use 'I think bicycles are not popular in my country.' 'Usually people. For bring the motorcycle.' is ungrammatical; combine into 'usually people use motorcycles.' Use present simple for general facts. Also replace 'bring' with 'use' or 'ride' for vehicles. Suggestion: 'Uh, actually I think bicycles are not popular in my country; usually people use motorcycles.' Note: This correction addresses Sentence structure errors (ID 26).