Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Add a clearer topic sentence, expand with one or two specific supporting details using linking words, avoid redundancy, and keep it under five sentences. Mention who you rode with, how often, or a memorable moment to make the answer more vivid.

例: Yes, I did — I had a small pink bicycle that I loved. In fact, I rode it to the park almost every afternoon with my older cousin, which helped me learn to ride without training wheels. Because the park was close to home, I got a lot of practice and grew more confident over time.

提案: Start with a concise topic sentence, then provide two specific reasons with linking words and a brief example or comparison. Use clearer vocabulary (e.g., inexpensive, practical) and correct small grammar issues ("it" → "they").

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Primarily, they are inexpensive and practical for short trips, and moreover they provide daily exercise; for example, many people cycle to the market instead of driving because parking is difficult in city centers.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it's cheap and also is a good exercise for every day.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are cheap and also a good form of exercise every day.

The original sentence uses the singular pronoun 'it' to refer to 'bikes' (plural), causing a pronoun-antecedent mismatch. Also 'is a good exercise' awkwardly treats 'exercise' countably and repeats the verb 'is'. Correct by using the plural pronoun 'they' to match 'bikes', remove the extra 'is' and use a clearer phrase 'a good form of exercise'. Additionally, place 'every day' at the end for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: always ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents and simplify noun phrases for clarity.