Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваша відповідь незрозуміла і містить помилки у слововживанні та граматиці. Скажіть чітко, чи мав(ла) ви велосипед, дайте коротке пояснення і, за потреби, одну деталь (наприклад, хто вам його подарував або чому ви його любили). Використовуйте просте минуле (I had / I didn't have) та уникайте невідповідних слів (наприклад, «granite»). Тримайте відповідь до 1–3 речень.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: Ваша відповідь має ідею, але сформульована невірно (неясний вираз «health bikes») і бракує конкретики. Дайте чітку думку, використайте зв'язку (because / for example) і наведіть одну конкретну причину чи приклад (наприклад, здоров'я або зручність). Тримайте 2–3 речення, уникайте зайвих слів.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many parents encourage cycling for children's health. For example, you can see lots of families cycling in parks on weekends.

× Yes, I had to buy granite was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence has multiple structural problems: words are in the wrong order and an incorrect noun 'granite' replaces 'a bike'. The correct structure for past possession uses 'I had a [thing] when I was a child.' Also include the verb 'was' with the subject 'I'. Suggestion: keep the simple past 'had' for possession and follow with a clear noun phrase, and use the clause 'when I was a child' for time reference. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I think health bikes are popular in my country for the children.

✓ I think healthy bikes are popular with children in my country.

The adjective 'health' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'healthy'. The preposition 'for' is awkward with 'children' here; native speakers say 'popular with children'. Also the phrase order 'in my country' typically comes after 'popular' or at the end; place it at the end for clarity. Suggestion: use 'healthy' to describe items that promote health and use 'popular with' to indicate who likes something. Grammar problem type ID:13