Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details. Avoid hesitation sounds (umm) and repeated words. Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, and keep to 2–4 sentences. For example, mention age range, purpose (school/market), and a brief reason why a bike was necessary.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle as a child. I grew up in a rural area with little public transport, so I used it every day to cycle to elementary school and to go to the market. It was practical and made getting around much easier.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with one or two specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and clearer vocabulary (e.g., "depends on the area," "narrow roads"). Keep responses natural and avoid fragmented phrases.

例: I think bikes are quite popular in some parts of my country. In rural and older urban neighbourhoods where public transport is limited and streets are narrow, many people rely on bicycles for daily travel.

× Yes, I had I grew up in a rural place where we don't have any transportation.

✓ Yes, I did. I grew up in a rural place where we didn't have any transportation.

The student mixed present and past tenses and repeated 'I had' incorrectly. The question asked about the past, so use past tense: 'did' as a short answer and 'grew up' and 'didn't have' to match past time reference. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when speaking about past events.

× So when we when I went to umm elementary school, I normally used to use bicycle to go there or market.

✓ So when I went to elementary school, I normally used to ride a bicycle to go there or to the market.

The phrase 'used to use bicycle' is awkward and uses incorrect verb choice and missing articles. 'Ride' is the correct verb for bicycles and 'a' is needed before 'bicycle'; include 'the' or 'to the' before 'market'. Also remove repeated words and fillers. Maintain past habitual aspect with 'used to'.

× I think it's depend which area we are living but I would be yes 'cause we normally don't have any transportation within detail like narrow Rd. so we need to use that.

✓ I think it depends on which area we live in, but I would say yes, because we normally don't have any transportation on narrow roads, so we need to use bikes.

The verb 'depend' must agree with 'it' as 'depends' (third person singular). 'Which area we are living' is awkward; use 'which area we live in'. 'I would be yes' should be 'I would say yes'. 'Within detail like narrow Rd.' is ungrammatical—use 'on narrow roads'. Finally, 'use that' is vague; replace with 'use bikes'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement and use prepositions correctly, choose precise nouns.