Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve by giving a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details linked with a cohesive connector. Avoid short repetitive sentences; combine ideas to sound more natural. For example, mention when you got it, who gave it, what you liked about it, and a brief memory or result.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child — a grey stunt bike my parents bought me for my eighth birthday. I loved its sturdy frame and the knobbly tires, so I spent most afternoons practicing jumps in the park and even learned a few basic tricks.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by specific reasons and a linking word to make your point clearer. Mention factors such as transport habits, infrastructure, climate, or safety to support your view and make it more convincing.

例: I don’t think bikes are very common in my country because most people prefer cars and public transport. Moreover, there is limited cycling infrastructure and traffic can be dangerous, so few people choose to cycle regularly.

× It was a stunt bike with grey color.

✓ It was a stunt bike with a grey color.

The noun phrase 'grey color' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct here. Alternatively, native speakers often say 'grey' without 'color' (for example, 'It was a grey stunt bike'). Suggestion: use 'a grey color' or say 'a grey stunt bike' to sound natural.

× It was beautiful.

✓ It was beautiful.

No grammatical change required. This sentence is correct as written and matches the past-tense context.

× I think bikes are not common in my country.

✓ I don't think bikes are common in my country.

The original sentence is understandable but the phrasing 'I think bikes are not common' is less natural in English. Changing to 'I don't think bikes are common' uses natural negative reporting with present tense and keeps the speaker's opinion. This adjustment improves naturalness while keeping present-tense opinion context.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'a bike' properly reflects one bicycle in the past. No correction needed.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

This question is grammatically correct. 'Did you have a bike' properly asks about one bicycle in the past. No correction needed.